Not impressed, the obedience to a needless non-musical rhyme has caused the whole structure to become sloppy, often ending the stanza with largely needless lines just to satiate the “A”
The pastiche of the classical is weak when we actually compare to materials beyond the modern approach to say Homer, if you go to nonnus or lycophron there’s just not a lot of blood-relation to the actual classical wit, the few anapestic subs are not well-executed.
“When topped with wine new nightly revels beckon,”
Is clearly slop and doesn’t achieve anything near the restoration era’s smooth elegance.
“Seeks return, but make him always roam”
Filled to the brim with filler.
“Listen, he-gods and she-gods, to my instruction;
Disaster’s recipe by ingredient we’ll add.”
Who can read those two and not just see sloppiness?
I should be less severe since the bulk of verse attempts on this place are horrible sentimental confessional trash, but when you attempt a higher standard you lift the bar for yourself, thus why I complain.
Not impressed, the obedience to a needless non-musical rhyme has caused the whole structure to become sloppy, often ending the stanza with largely needless lines just to satiate the “A”
The pastiche of the classical is weak when we actually compare to materials beyond the modern approach to say Homer, if you go to nonnus or lycophron there’s just not a lot of blood-relation to the actual classical wit, the few anapestic subs are not well-executed.
“When topped with wine new nightly revels beckon,”
Is clearly slop and doesn’t achieve anything near the restoration era’s smooth elegance.
“Seeks return, but make him always roam”
Filled to the brim with filler.
“Listen, he-gods and she-gods, to my instruction;
Disaster’s recipe by ingredient we’ll add.”
Who can read those two and not just see sloppiness?
I should be less severe since the bulk of verse attempts on this place are horrible sentimental confessional trash, but when you attempt a higher standard you lift the bar for yourself, thus why I complain.
I'm deleting this comment shortly, friendlet. I recommend you post it on Amazon or Goodreads.
Ordered. Now ill have to carve out 45 minutes for fun :)
Nice! But only 45 minutes!